There's a prize for anyone who can guess the tramstop. Leave your guesses in the comments or on my facebook page.
His fly wide open and the back of his trousers ripped, the man looked like a tramp, but he wasn’t, he just didn’t have the energy to take care of himself anymore. He let his tram go by, there’d be another one along in a few minutes and, on balmy afternoons like this one it was better to stand and watch the world go by that sit and watch the same four walls he’d been staring at for the best and worst part of 40 years. He couldn’t stand and wait too long though, or little Betsy would be annoying the neighbours crying for food.
He watched the young lad help the woman off the tram with her pushchair.
She had a smiling face but tired eyes. The boy was not much younger than the
mother, his hair gelled forward, all going in one direction. He smiled at the
woman as he put the wheels of the pram on the pavement. ‘a beautiful baby,
takes after her mother.’ With that he
was gone but those 7 words put the spring in the step of woman who thought her
spring had sprung some months before.
The boy and girl were springing though, springing on to the tram the
woman and pram had just got off. Not quite holding hands, not quite a couple but
very close. Going home from school, laughing, joking, smiling like only 15
year-old soon-to-be couples could. Maybe they were discovering the thrills of
falling in love for the first time, maybe it was their second whatever it was they
were still young enough for everything to be fresh, new, adventurous. Something
special for them, something to savour.
The woman with the ice cream watched them, her eyes misting over,
thinking of when she was in their place? She’d decided to treat herself to one last ice cream of the summer. Since the divorce that was her outlook, she did
things because she wanted, not because it was expected. The tattoo, the anklet,
the skirt maybe a bit too short for a woman of her age, she didn’t care, it
made her feel sexy, she got admiring glances from lads half her age and after
the way he’d tried to destroy her she wanted to feel good about herself.
The old guy turned his attention to the kids on the bench, 16, 17, also on
their way home from school. Laughing, joking, just a little too loud perhaps.
They were smoking in the least rebellious way possible. Not a shared ciggie
bummed off some passer-by, but an electronic cigarette. He thought of the
trouble he got into when he’d first smoked, the hiding he took from his dad
who’d smelt it on him as soon as he’d walked through the door . Now there was
no smell, and nothing to hide. These kids were taking up a habit designed to
help others lose theirs. The world's gone mad he thought to himself as he got on
his tram and headed back to his cat.
The first thing that sprang to mind was that the man might be waiting at the tram stop called Desire :-) Just an association ... and too many literature lessons at high school.
ReplyDeletethe tramstop is "déjà vu".. the point where life is folded upon itself
ReplyDeleteas I had it.. I sent you an e-mail
The tram stop is called Missed Opportunity. The man is watching all the things he longs for...family, kids, love...but he has no more energy to pursue his dreams; he lets all the trams go by thinking there'll be another one. But all he has is little Betsy crying for food....
ReplyDelete... and each time a new tram arrives, the voice in the lodspeaker says "It's not your tram.." and the man obeys and continues waiting until he suddenly realizes it is too late to go anywhere...
ReplyDeleteAre you encouraging him to slash his wrists?!!.. maybe he's comfortable with his routine, his cat cares.. Behind their willingness to observe is the hope of seeing something that will encourage him to change .. I don't see his self-pity.. maybe he knows it's better to live the life he has than to live wrong the one he doesn't have and ever wanted
Deleteencouraging him to slash his wrists? with so many exclamation marks?:) No you overinterpreted. The man eventually gets on his tram, probably the same tram he takes everyday, which means he is comfortable with his life, maybe he doesn't need any change. I was thinking about loudspeakers in a broader sens: there are voices that tell us what to do or not to do and sometimes we blindly listen to them and don't change our ways because we don't want to leave our comfort zones or think too much about other people's opinions.... Some people regret it, some don't - all of us are different (thank God)
Deletehe is on his 40s.. a 2nd spring ;-) .. so, tramstop is The Spring.. so there would be another one for each season :-))
ReplyDeleteThe correct answer is: The Main Train Station Tram Stop in Prague.
ReplyDeletesadly not the right answer but not too far away :-)
DeleteOk......It might as well be Ostrava, Olomouc or Brno ;-) It must be somewhere around the train station, though. Where else to expect a man with trousers ripped watching the passers-by (probably on a regular basis). What about a hint, Gareth?
DeleteIt is in prague and it might have something to do with fitted furniture.
DeleteThe Tram Stop Národní třída, Prague......
DeleteNo more 'peaceful' than that :-)
DeleteNáměstí Míru :-)
DeleteCongratualtions :-) Please choose your prize :-)
DeleteWow! This is going to be interesting....What are the options?
DeleteThe options are anything up to a monetary value of the coffee I was drinking when I wrote the story - 40Kcs :-)
DeleteI need another clue :-)
DeleteYour previous clue is actually my clue as well :-)
DeleteI give up :-( sorry :-) I'm not very clever :-)
DeleteI suspect that you want to keep the 40,-Kč :-D
DeleteI get it now :-)
DeleteI thought so :-)
DeleteThe prize is the writer? wearing ripped trousers waiting for his Cat-woman
ReplyDeleteI'm disappointed.. I was thinking in that tramstop in a figurative sense, not real!
Don't be disappointed. Sometimes a cigar is just a cigar.....
DeleteI'm not the prize :-)
Deletemore peaceful??? hmmm still stuck
DeleteI'd rather remain 'silent' from now on :-)
DeleteI don't know why but the story and the comments made me think about The Stereetccar named Desire:)... and BTW this contest is biased, Gareth. it's only for your Czech readers...
ReplyDeleteYou're wrong. Because of what you just wrote it's not ONLY for Czech readers. Just scroll up the page and look at the first comment. And the tram stop could be anywhere in the world.....you could have tried to google it the same way as I did, hehe.
Deleteyeah.... the first comment... oh my reading comprehension skills are very bad....;)
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